Issue Two, Page Thirty/Thirty-One Double Page Spread

February 17, 2020 in Issue Two
Issue Two, Page Thirty/Thirty-One Double Page Spread
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Author Notes:

MattSchofield 17th Feb 2020, 9:00 AM
MattSchofield
This page was designed to work as a double-page spread in print, so I'm not sure how well it will work as a webcomic page. Hopefully most of you can see it okay. If not, PLEASE let me know in the comments and I can upload closer, partial views of the overall image - or something.

I decided to try a double-page spread for a few reasons. First, I thought the story warranted it. I think having one large image, as large as the physical dimensions of a printed comic will permit, helps to convey the fearsome majesty of this new location, where (spoiler alert!) the climax of this issue will take place. A large image like this makes the reader slow down and really take things in, which is exactly what Paige and Sugar Daddy are doing at this point in the story! One thing I'm learning from making my own comic is how to pace the story using the various tools of comics. Panels of different sizes and shapes are actually read at different speeds by the reader, and so the author can control the pace that the reader progresses by tailoring the space each panel takes up on the page. I already knew a lot of this in theory from reading books like Scott McCloud's excellent and seminal Understanding Comics, but it's been a ton of fun experimenting with these principles myself!

My second reason for this double-page spread was as an homage to Jack Kirby. Kirby was magnificent at conveying massive, cosmic scale on the comic page and would often use double-page spreads to do it. Here's one from his comic, Captain Victory. Amazing stuff!

He often did this when depicting futuristic machines that had some grand purpose. I even tried to capture some of the flavor of his bombastic prose in my captions.

I struggled quite a bit with the text on these pages. Many, many drafts to try and get the Kirby-like tone to it. I discovered that coming up with dialogue for characters to speak to each other is much easier for me than writing narration. I definitely learned the truth in the maxim "Writing is Rewriting".

One last thing - I hope you guys get the subtle pun in the name of the machine "Semple-Platt Device"... I don't know if it's a bit too subtle... anyone?

Comments:

MK_Wizard 17th Feb 2020, 9:08 AM
MK_Wizard
That looks... dangerous. One false move and things can get real.
MattSchofield 17th Feb 2020, 11:52 AM
MattSchofield
Good! I'm glad it looks dangerous! We're right on the edge of the final confrontation between these two!
...(RockB) 17th Feb 2020, 1:54 PM
...(RockB)
An impressive page!

("Semple-Platt device" really sounds like it has a special meaning, but I have to admit that don't get it. Maybe someone else...?)
Phoenix In Crisis 17th Feb 2020, 2:19 PM
Phoenix In Crisis
Hmmmm. The "Simple Plot Device"?
MattSchofield 17th Feb 2020, 2:33 PM
MattSchofield
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...(RockB) 18th Feb 2020, 12:44 AM
...(RockB)
My wholehearted congrats :)
I totally didn't expect something that - simple :)
Saeriellyn 18th Feb 2020, 8:07 AM
Saeriellyn
Double page looks great, though I sympathize with this site’s difficulty in giving it the same impact it would have in print. I’ve struggled with the question of whether it’s worth doing - having some very epic landscapes in my comic, it would help - but ultimately I’ve gone the mobile-optimization vertical route. I wish it didn’t have to be one or the other.

I favor dialogue over narration as well, generally, but in this type of comic and how it homages the classics, it works. I’m no expert on the topic, but the way you’ve written it - fluent italics and all - is true to your inspiration.

Can’t wait to see how the hero is going to charge in and flatten this situation. XD
MattSchofield 18th Feb 2020, 2:50 PM
MattSchofield
Thanks for the always thoughtful comments! My dream is to print this eventually, so I'm following the conventions of printed comic books. I started the comic with zero knowledge of webcomics and how they worked, so it certainly presented me with a bit of a quandary when I realized "oh, if my export size has to stay at 940 px wide, then that means... oh..."
Ultimately I just decided to press on regardless, and stick to the original plan.
Miaubol 19th Feb 2020, 1:04 AM
Miaubol
Now it seriously gets serious business ;D

(The double page works well on my screen, I can see and read everything without any problems. But maybe it's a good idea to increase the size somewhat, so that we also really get the feel of a double-page? And while the text is easy to read, it will be more pleasant to read when somewhat larger. The page shouldn't be too big however, I'd say max 1100 dots wide.

The narrative text is great, I've read a lot of those comics and I really recognized the tone :D)
Francis 19th Feb 2020, 8:47 AM
Francis
Another beautiful page. I like to draw and ink everything by hand. I really hate staring at screens for hours on end, but since discovering your comic and how amazing you're able to make in look using Clip Studio Paint, I'm very tempted to start using it.

As far as readability, it looks good on my laptop. Not sure how it would read on a phone though. Not a fan of reading comics on a phone either.
MattSchofield 19th Feb 2020, 9:04 AM
MattSchofield
Thank you, I'm glad it's readable!

Yes, I absolutely love Clip Studio Paint, it's fantastic for making comics!
Mrremoraman 17th Mar 2020, 10:45 AM
Mrremoraman
THat is some awesome writing there!
skowog 23rd Nov 2020, 8:55 PM
Just epic!
MattSchofield 24th Nov 2020, 6:11 AM
MattSchofield
Thank you!